The
Enjoyable Kerinci
The majority greatest
moment in my life besides spending much time with my mother is when I visit
Kerinci, Jambi. There are three special magnets that ask me to visit it again
and again. The loveliness scenery with greenly land, the secure atmosphere, and
the incredible weather by way of cool. I went through a remarkable time for
feel the joy in Kerinci will not simply through pass in my mind and my heart.
First, the
loveliness scenery there is cover of greenly land. The hill, the mountain, and
the horticulture they are full of light green over all. I love the way I wake
up in the morning and see that view, it such as give a new essence in every
part of my sense. However, the pleasant lake there will give you an airy for
your soul. They are always support for shouting my heart to stopover there.
Then, the secure
atmosphere is getting you lost through heaven. Trees surrounding let you
consider the quite long all day. The bird’s chirp, hen’s crow and the food with
smell of firewood offer you an extraordinary touch. The peaceful night take a
passion in your mind. The sound of many animal clearly heard, the fire-fly
clearly seen dyeing your before sleep.
Third,
the incredible weather by way of cool is
the next magnet yet isn’t at least in fact. The
gentle breeze was just enough to make it comfortable. The
grass had already dried from the early morning dew, it blowing makes freshly. You will suffer very frigid moment
in the sunset time. The moment pinkish-yellow
into golden sun was setting; make the atmosphere is expecting us for hug the
sky for its cool.
If
I could, I would go back and relive some of these memories. No matter where I
go, Kerinci will be home in my heart. No matter my age, Keinci holds some of
the most memorable and cherishing parts of my life. Looking like these all memories will not be
forgotten in entire my rest.
Your essay is good, you can describe Kerinci with beautiful sentences. However for fourth, It will be better for you to use 'finally' as transition. If you use 'third', that means you have another or some others paragraphs with new idea for each paragraph after that. That's all. I hope you will be better and better. ^_^
ReplyDeletethanks a lot my dear friend, it's nice to hear your truth opinion, it really helps me:)
ReplyDeleteVery good, it makes me interested to go there But I don't really understand about "the loveliness scenery there is cover of greenly land". maybe you can say "the lovely scenery that covers the green land".
ReplyDeleteBut overall, I like your strong description about Kerinci :)